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The Way I Remember It... by Selahsaurus
September 19th, 2010 11:51 AM
This is actually a writing challenge in a group of mine for September. Time line from 15-21. That's as early as you are going to get from me.
My answer to the September Writing Challenge by Ginny Wiehardt. Enjoy if you can.
Challenge reads as follows: For the exercise, think of an episode from your own past and then rewrite it from a perspective other than your own. It can be in first person point of view or third, so long as it's not from your own POV. 600 words or less.
Word Count: 255
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I had very nearly sworn off the opposite sex all together for the greedy, manipulative little things that they were when she announced herself with a beep on my cell phone. Innocuous, I know, but every once in a while, even a hurricane announces itself with the flap of a butterfly's wings. She was a stranger - and a stranger girl I have never met. Where she got my number, I hadn't the faintest. When I found out later that my sister had been involved, I was surprised that I was surprised.
That girl was as crazy as I had ever seen them and, quite often, I found myself ruing that I had ever opened that intriguing first message she sent me.
She argued with me endlessly.
She would snap at the slightest aggravation.
She took offense at nearly every word that came out of my mouth.
She thought that she knew everything about everything, and I swear to God, if I hadn't hated girls before I met her, I certainly hated them now.
But now we are in a hospital room, and she's panting on a gurney. Sweat is beading at her brows, and I, for once, am scared.
A scream rents the air, and then... silence.
She look at me, and for once, is quiet.
But of course, she never was one to stay quiet for very long.
"Look, Chris."
She presents me with our daughter, and all at once, I find that I don't think girls are all that bad after all.
My answer to the September Writing Challenge by Ginny Wiehardt. Enjoy if you can.
Challenge reads as follows: For the exercise, think of an episode from your own past and then rewrite it from a perspective other than your own. It can be in first person point of view or third, so long as it's not from your own POV. 600 words or less.
Word Count: 255
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I had very nearly sworn off the opposite sex all together for the greedy, manipulative little things that they were when she announced herself with a beep on my cell phone. Innocuous, I know, but every once in a while, even a hurricane announces itself with the flap of a butterfly's wings. She was a stranger - and a stranger girl I have never met. Where she got my number, I hadn't the faintest. When I found out later that my sister had been involved, I was surprised that I was surprised.
That girl was as crazy as I had ever seen them and, quite often, I found myself ruing that I had ever opened that intriguing first message she sent me.
She argued with me endlessly.
She would snap at the slightest aggravation.
She took offense at nearly every word that came out of my mouth.
She thought that she knew everything about everything, and I swear to God, if I hadn't hated girls before I met her, I certainly hated them now.
But now we are in a hospital room, and she's panting on a gurney. Sweat is beading at her brows, and I, for once, am scared.
A scream rents the air, and then... silence.
She look at me, and for once, is quiet.
But of course, she never was one to stay quiet for very long.
"Look, Chris."
She presents me with our daughter, and all at once, I find that I don't think girls are all that bad after all.
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posted by Selahsaurus on November 21st, 2010 9:36 PM
Sorry about the late response to this, but life has been... weird.
I thought that it may be a bit retrotasking as well, which was sort of why I threw in the comments on the pictures as though they were written from his point of view. Thought it may help even it out a bit.
posted by artmouse on November 22nd, 2010 4:45 PM
hey, a lot of SF0 is a learning process and it's good to see you're willing to stick through it and seek to improve your tasking - I hope it's as beneficial and interesting to you as it is for us, the readers and voters.














it's always curious to see someone else coming up with nearly an exact idea as yourself - but then again, originality is practically arbitrary in this day and age.
i'm a bit put-off by the fact it's perhaps a bit of 'retroactive' tasking... but i am grateful someone is actually even completing this task, and that you have done so in a rather touching manner.
so, thank you for your completion!